Monday, June 20, 2011

Waiting For Heaven

A Haunted Soul  Episode 1

I was murdered last night. Does it really matter how, or even why? The only thing that interests me at all right now is that I'll be going to Heaven soon. There will be a shimmering doorway, or perhaps a stairway into the sky. Maybe one of my old loved ones or an angel will come for me. However it is, it's going to be wonderful. It should happen any time now.

You know, death wasn't necessarily like I expected it to be. What I mean is, I didn't really know what to expect. After they killed me I found myself sitting here on this big stone outside the front of the castle. I have a sense of the passage of some hours, but I don't know how I got here. Should I?

The only thing that bothers me is how it was done. Oh, I fully expected that someone wanted to assassinate me. It's standard procedure in families of my stature. But they did it all wrong. You have to pay attention to protocol. There are ways of doing these things that show respect to your victim, and then there was the way they did it to me. Anyone can understand.

I do have to say that they completely caught me off guard. I had just gotten back from a fishing trip, which was one of my favorite activities by the way, and I was heading to my rooms to get a good night sleep. From around a corner in the hallway stepped a man I had never seen before. I could tell right then by the look in his eyes exactly what he was up to. As a matter of fact, I chuckled at my own foolishness for letting my guard down.

As the man sauntered toward me I prepared for a fight, but I had no chance because he was soon joined by a few of of his friends. One of them caught me from behind, and it was all too soon over with. I really should have known better than to let this happen, but how did I know they would play it so dirty? It was just not right!

But that's all over with now. That life is all in the past for me. I'll soon be in Heaven, and everything will be more wonderful than I could have ever hoped for in my previous life. I'm just sitting here on this boulder in the middle of the night waiting for it to happen. It should be coming along any time now. Any time.


  1. I'm liking this Ratty...there are sooo many things that could happen here...and I'm thinking that it's going to be a while before this guy reaches heaven.......can't wait for the next episode!!

  2. @allotments4you
    It's kind of rough being a ghost. Our main character has yet to figure that out. He'll have a lesson to learn when the next episode comes out next week.

  3. You sure understood everything about the Importance of the First Line, huh? I simply love that 'I was murdered last night' – I mean, who wouldn't want to read on after that? And now you've got me waiting for the follow-up. How nasty of you! Lol ;-)

  4. @Dieter Moitzi
    I learned about the first line from Terry Goodkind, the author of The Sword Of Truth series. I have tried to follow it ever since. I hope my short series is enjoyable every step of the way.

  5. Hi, we found you blog through Dieter Moitzi. Your writing is really good...I enjoyed reading this post. The whole tone of your site is great.


  6. this is an interesting start i look forward to reading more.

  7. @Tammy and Mike
    Thank you very much. I'm glad Dieter and you both found my blog, Michael.

    @Mike Golch
    The next episode will be coming Monday. They are coming every two weeks. I hope you like my next one.

  8. Interesting, I can't wait to see where this is leading.

  9. @John
    I hope it leads to a well liked place when it's all finally over. The next episode will be Monday.

  10. wow very interesting, i feel real.

  11. @Silvergirl
    Thank you very much.

  12. "Maybe heaven won't be coming..." I hope you figure this one out before your next post! ; )

    Good story!

  13. @Linda
    Thanks. The next post is out now, so you can see if our ghost finds out what is happening. The third episode will be coming tomorrow.


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